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紫薇浪人

虽说不能以辞害意  但既是七律就应该守其行  抒己意

紫薇浪人

人微言轻  愧对方家

舞之云

教不了您~~嘿嘿，您那么大学问，尽可以闭眼路过！！！本主不怪哦！哈哈~~~

建议您去诗社，那里应该有您要寻找的问题。

舞之云

日边月冷浸青山

弱柳似轻鬟

暮暮朝朝流连

人静后

梦波澜

琴自语

意堪寒

任阑珊

泪空草蔓

素手痴眸

顾伊悠然

舞之云

在这个陌生的世界里

我舞狂野，我舞心灵，

我舞我的人生，

我舞我的灵魂~~~

我将继续我的网络生涯，

网游在这个没有人认识我的世界里！

我自孤独，

我自张狂！

舞之云

清晨访遍朝露，

黄昏遍访晚霞；

春日雨中漫步，

夏日花前月下，

秋日举杯邀月，

冬日踏雪寻梅；

醉里挑灯看剑，

梦里缠绵缱眷……吾自由！！

1马力

没有人认识你?我偏偏就要认识^~^ ^~^ ^~^

舞之云

呵呵~~~~是朋友偶欢迎，而且真诚！

老伙计

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引用第10楼紫薇浪人于2006-08-02 10:25发表的“”: 虽说不能以辞害意 但既是七律就应该守其行 抒己意

</p><p>也看到兄台对另一首七律在格律上的建议，确实七律有相当严格的要求，包括平仄对立，平仄相粘，两个对仗，还必须用平韵，还不能用邻韵，还必须用平水韵，呵呵。</p><p>其实现在的平仄和过去大不一样，兄台是个中人，应该知道现在没有入声字了，说普通话的人根本不理解什么是入声字，在我们江浙的方言中倒还保留入声字。在韵方面，使用现在的中华新韵也未尝不可。在今天写古诗词，为了不牺牲意思，有些不合律也不必去深究。</p><p>录一首经典的仄韵词，古今大不同啊~~~</p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt 28.5pt; TEXT-INDENT: -28.5pt; mso-list: l0 level1 lfo1; tab-stops: list 28.5pt"><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ""; mso-hansi-font-family: """>忆秦娥·思秋</span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: """><font face="Times New Roman"></font></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ""; mso-hansi-font-family: """>李白</span><span lang="EN-US" style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: """><br /></span><span style="FONT-SIZE: 14pt; COLOR: black; FONT-FAMILY: 宋体; mso-ascii-font-family: ''; mso-hansi-font-family: ''">箫声咽，秦娥梦断秦楼月。秦楼月（叠三字），年年柳色，</span></p><p class="MsoNormal" style="MARGIN: 0cm 0cm 0pt; 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taishan

引用第9楼紫薇浪人于2006-08-02 10:20发表的“”:
吾才疏学浅  不知七律有多少种格式  我只记有四种  哪位贤达可以教我

我辈大多俗人，才疏学浅，更非贤达一流，正己已无能，焉敢教高明者你。不过此处乃青鸟友人自娱之地，兴之所发，发出内心之言足矣，不是想混个诗人作家之类去立身立言，开启冥顽，是以，看罢或会心一笑或雅谑而附，大可不必做饱学状。其实，发诸有唐以下，又有几人完全符合格律，高明如李杜，亦多有不工处，若非四格而不为诗，只怕您只能读自己诗了。